Round 2

I read Essays B, C, and d. The hook of essay B is rather boring and if I had picked up that essay I would have sighed..  Like a history paper, the thesis comes after the topic sentence. That was a tad awkward for me and veered my interest in the essay even further. The rest of the introduction is stuffed with examples that should be put in the body paragraphs to develop the ideas better. Hence, the claims maid are not developed well in the paragraphs and jump quickly into a new idea that sometimes is not even mentioned in the introduction. Essay C has in intense topic sentence that could be less wordy. The thesis could be more assertive, less wordy, and a little less harsh on Mrs. Bennet. The overall point that pursuing financial gain through your daughters and being a gossip queen makes you crazy is developed well throughout the body paragraphs.