Mr. Collins: Funny or Nightmare?

To Elizabeth, Mr. Collins is a Nightmare. She values love for what it truly is and, unfortunately for her, the norm in her society is to marry for an economic gain. For Mr. Collins to propose to Elizabeth is a comic relief for some however Elizabeth is almost captured by the "comic monster" that embodies the social institutions of that day. Moreover, in the readers eyes Mr. Collins interactions with, for example, Lady Catherine are considered comical; especially to the readers of the eighteen-hundreds.

Turn It In Comments: Areas to work on..

I definitely need to manage my time more wisely.. Most of the mistakes that I made could have been fixed simply by reviewing the essay. By editing the essay the many of the phrasings would be less awkward. Also, by prepping more and allowing more time to write the essay, the claims made would be more thought out. Moreover, the point of the essay was not too convincing due to lack of analysis. Instead of proving a point, I kind of rambled about the general idea rather than structuring evidence and analysis to support the claims made. The essay digresses from topic to topic which means I need to work on focusing on one point and fully developing it. The thesis is also too general and I am going to make it more controversial. I do not think this essay is my best work. If I allow more time and revise the essay I'll show my true potential.

Round 2

I read Essays B, C, and d. The hook of essay B is rather boring and if I had picked up that essay I would have sighed..  Like a history paper, the thesis comes after the topic sentence. That was a tad awkward for me and veered my interest in the essay even further. The rest of the introduction is stuffed with examples that should be put in the body paragraphs to develop the ideas better. Hence, the claims maid are not developed well in the paragraphs and jump quickly into a new idea that sometimes is not even mentioned in the introduction. Essay C has in intense topic sentence that could be less wordy. The thesis could be more assertive, less wordy, and a little less harsh on Mrs. Bennet. The overall point that pursuing financial gain through your daughters and being a gossip queen makes you crazy is developed well throughout the body paragraphs.

ROUND 1: Sample Student Essays

Out of the three essays I read, all of them had interesting points made; however, N for Natasha was my favorite. The hook caught my interest with its elegant vocabulary and the comparison of a story and gambling enforced my desire to read on. The writer is, no doubt, well educated on both topics and is able to stay on topic relieving the reader of being confused by the comparison of the two topics. The thesis statement is clear and concise. It gives factual information that is later elaborated on. Bueno.  

Distinguishing Characters: Jane Austen's effective use of the foil

The use of foils distinguishes characters revealing their personalities, opinions, and morals thus deepening in the reader a solid understanding of what each character’s prejudices are.